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I Would Like An Opinion On My Poem?

a poem about walking away from my mother for the last time after her funeral. my mother was dying of cancer and i got married so she could be there, unfortunately she got worse just before the wedding. but i did get married at home by her side while holding her hand. it was very emotional. please be honest as i have never wrote before, i am looking for honest opinions / suggestions.
Our final goodbye
I had to leave your side today,
I had to walk away.
And though it tore my heart apart,
I just couldn’t stay.
Mom for you I tried,
to be strong and brave.
But I just couldn’t help but cry,
as I left your grave.
All I thought about mom,
was the good times that we shared.
My beautiful and gentle mom,
and oh how much she cared.
You fought so hard,
that I must say.
Too be there for my wedding day.
Although you were too sick to share,
our dance that we had planned.
While I took my wedding vows,
you were there and held my hand.
So now I must go on mom,
without you in my life.
An awful thought that deep inside,
cuts me like a knife.
And though it tears my heart in half,
to know that this is true.
It is the last and final thing,
which I must do for you.
There is just one last thing mom,
that I hope for you.
Just one last and final hope,
all that I can do.
Just to hope your pain is gone,
and that you rest in peace.
Something that I pray to god,
Too give to you at least.
So as I walk away mom,
As I leave your side.
I leave a piece of me mom,
a hole left deep inside.
So I guess then this is it mom,
Time for our final goodbye,
A memory that will always,
Make me stop and cry.
And though I know it’s not forever,
and I’ll see you again someday.
Our last and final goodbye,
Is all we’ll have today.
DavidDC114


2 Comments

  1. Marinka M says:

    This is a really great poem made me cry and i really like that you put your heart in it….im really sorry about what happened….But i hope your life gets better…..the pain will still be there but, i hope you can move on…. the poem is great i will save it so i can read it once in a while its great….:)

  2. Windowle says:

    You have grammatical errors in here, that throw every thing off.
    Also, you don’t need to keep putting “mom”, because in the first stanza, we all know who you are talking about. Plus, it also ruins the flow of the poem.

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